you dont need to tell the dude "u just put em an hour ago" and sound like a smartass...
He acknowledged his mistake and now realizes the rules...cut em some slack

just sayin

Thanks man, some respect. Being new isn't always respected in this kinda stuff.

Ye..bein here long enough i thot maybe some ppl would have a attitude change..guess not
i read your drop and its very mediocre
you need to be a bit more complex sorta say..use more multis in ur rhymes...i see where this is all headin and the rhyme sceme is layed out pretty good but addin a bit more rhymes would help out your flow
Instead of rhymin at the end of each line...try rhymin somthin in the middle aswell...it gives it a bit more of a edge nahmean?
but good stuff keep it up

i thot i left feed on this hella days ago...
i definitely read it a while ago. so my bad

this wasnt bad, especially considering ur 15.
i think that ur vocab is great, but if u used ur vocab to spit different material it would b better...
gunplay is like the most played out subject in rap, especially wen most people makin the claims hav never pulled a trigger.
i dont kno u, so im not sayin u haven't... but simply becuz of the history of other rappers, i assume u haven't.
ur 15 tho, thats pretty young. givs u plenty of time to shape ur style to somethin u can truly call urs.
use that diction to ur advantage and come up wit sometin that people r gonna feel on a real level.
also the structure/flow wasnt very good. id say for now, try makin each line no more than 15 syllables... try to average around 14. cuz if u wer to rap some shit at 14 syllables, ull notice that itll come off real naturally and have a nice rhythm. once u get a solid steady flow down, then u can focus on switchin up ur flow numerous times within one verse etc. but counting my syllables definitely helped me to start shapin my flow correctly.
jus keep at it and ull progress

Thanks man, I've pulled a trigger, not at anyone though. But I have been subject to a lot of gun violence which inspired me. Thanks for the flow help, I have noticed my flow is bad too.

Thanks man, this wasn't given as much thought as expression, I'll keep it mind though.