Hard Act To Follow


(Break)

Time passes slowly...
...with each second I feel the sting,
The harsh wind against my face as I'm walking to the ring...
Twelve rounds I'll fight, to get you back by my side...
This nightmare replays...
...I grasp your picture for dear life...


(Body)

Never my wife...
...brought me too my knees full throttle;
Now I drown away sorrows with a whisky liquor bottle,
...hoping that tomorrow, I won't feel this sick and hollow,
But I know in my heart, and it hurts when I swallow...

This alcohol;
It numbs the pain of knowing what I lost.
I made mistakes I know...
...but with my tears I've paid the cost;
The time I spend...
...staring at your picture of perfection/
I wish I could tipp-ex the past and rewrite corrections;
Refresh connections...
...like a loose wire within my circuit;
My heart is really fragile so it's easy to hurt it...

A flame burns for you inside...
...like my veins flow fuel;
But this stuntglass facade shatters when I play it cool;
Porcelain emotion- so flawless,
...yet soft and delicate/
I know it's over...
...yet I write for you... for the hell of it.

Hope one day I'll get the chance...
-to take the stance;
On one knee in your presence like I'm trying to breakdance;
Not Breakeven...
....I've seen the Scripts and can't believe them;
I'm The Man Who Can't Be Moved, and I can't stop grieving.

So deceiving, teasing,
...whilst I try to be all you need and;
If you were falling then I'd catch you...
-even without a free hand.
To be the reason...
...you smile when you wake up in the morning...
Yawning...
...soft kisses as the daybreak is slowly dawning...

So I'm mourning...
...tears trace the contours of my cheeks/
Trickle down my face across my lips as my mouth softly speaks;
Whispering words...
...that I wish you could hear me breathing,
everytime I get close...
...you close your eyes and you're leaving...


(Break)

Time passes slowly...
...with each second I feel the sting,
The harsh wind against my face as I'm walking to the ring...
Twelve rounds I'll fight, to get you back by my side...
This nightmare replays...
...I grasp your picture for dear life...




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this is deep man

your a good writer and its sad that u aint got the feed

It's cool, I'm getting views which tells me that people are still acknowledging even if they don't reply.

I don't write for the audience, I write for myself.

yeh... but still be nice to get some feed

i like ya writin

keep it up

You know why you don't get much feed. Your ish is normally too complicated for some to understand ( I don't even think J-Con understands but I ain't even know who the fuck he is, neither do I care)

Not to sound contradicting (go on I know your dyin to highlight the grammer) but your work can be easy enough to understand if people read it properly.

I ain't got time to read this in-depth but hopefully in the next few days I'll read this and feed, along with your other drops you've posted recently. ( I'll get to yours too Majik!!)

Props JonJon.

As I said previously, I appreciate feed- heck, who doesn't? But I write predominantly for myself, to process emotions and thoughts. I post them to allow others to associate with them, hopefully people will find some familiarity and relativity that will allow them to sort themselves out/process their issues.

realist talk right there sir. the whole feedback concept is awkward. understandable, but awkward nonetheless. how much does beggin or askin for a reaction dilute an actual response if ones were to be forthcoming. nothing natural about feed if such feed is only to be compensated unnaturally. but what do i know? i'm just a lurker hahahahahah

Yeah, that's my personal opinion. The comment that stands out to me there is:

I would prefer people to only feed if they have something contributory or relevant to mention. Why comment with empty and hollow lies that hold no substance? It doesn't benefit me, and I'll keep doing what I do regardless of negativity or positivity. I'll still do this because it is predominantly for my own benefit, but if others can relate to it and want to leave me some feedback, then I more than welcome it.

exactly. i see many that hit up topics just saying somethin is 'dope' or 'nice' or 'good shit' or 'keep it up' or 'it sucks' or 'wack' or 'u suck at this or that' and that shit is a waste. it's important to contribute wheneva possible. anything short of that takes away from the experience.

yo this is nice man, i dont know if you got a prollem with me or not, but regardless... your blessed and you do have skill's, you should consider being a ghost writer...
anyways, im outy, 1
P.S. nice peice