Oh, how the mighty have fallen as I slowly glide to the bottom
Ready or not
Love comes seeking me as I try to find me a spot and hide from the problem
See, cupid likes to come through just to shoot this fellow
And whenever I'm tired of feeling pain, I remove the arrow
But this time around, he put this one
In the same place as the last time when he left my mood in peril
That's right; same girl, same feelings and the exact same situation
I possess all the moves but that doesn't matter when my game isn't played with
'Cause he put my arrow right beside the first one that still effects her heart
And though she's tired of letting that one hurt her, it is just as hard
To just simply forget about that special part
Of her life. .so I have to wait
And the distance is just as far as it was before
I just want to be where she's at, but the spot next to her seems reserved
For the one she loves and it looks as though he was first
And I know how it played out the first time, I've already seen the worst
Still, I stay hoping for the best believing that we get what we deserve
So I loiter out the doorsteps of her inner circle trying to be as close as possible
So that when she opens up, there will be no more obstacles and she'll just let me in
Trying to be her bestest friends, if she were to come out and request for him
That's like watching the sun about to set and end so that between it and me's the earth
And to be honest, I don't want the moon. .I'd rather eat the dirt
That's just how much it means to me and I've given this a lot of thought
See, ain't nothing wrong with ice cream, but it's no sundae if the cherry is not on top
I don't know where to go from here like I've gotten lost
It's like I'm just a relaying vessel between my mind and the world
So when she says to wait, my brains response is DOT. . .DOT. . .DOT
'Cause I was taught that if you want something you take it, no one's gonna hand it to you
So how am I supposed to believe that I'm going to get what I want if I just stand here and do
Nothing, while anotha man is here who I've no idea if he plans to pursue
My victory. .just tryna' be a winner and I can't if I loose
It's more than just winning and I'm not just tryna' score
I'm trying to assist her in transitioning to now from all those times before
And I've stepped up my offense since I know now, that's he's 'round
Then she tells me to go back and defend while she attacks from each end
Won't play on my side 'cause she says she don't want to use me to get over him
In other words, she's not down to rebound
What's worse is being sidelined especially when it's supposed to be my time
But she let him back into the game and now it's tied, tight
And as she takes on the hardwood, I ride pine. .so, why lie??
She could win the championship without me and all I'll be able to say is that I tried


http://www.anotha.com/f30/the-power-...-heart-t54317/
http://www.anotha.com/f30/new-stream...usness-t64755/
http://www.anotha.com/f30/a-moment-of-clarity-t66066/

Never saw you drop this fam? Only seen it because I looked to see if you were still online & you were viewing this thread haha...

Okay, so the subject is kinda played, me & you both touch upon this frequently do we not? Though nice fresh angle as ever, the idea is surmised in the title... the idea of sitting around playing second fiddle, wishfully waiting upon a call that may never come...

Relating this idea to being benched in ball is a nice slant, and the metaphors employed are second to none. This is best seen in the final 6 lines. The vocabulary is fitting, especially the puns and wordplay inkeeping with the concept.

The flow suffers in places from an aesthetic viewpoint, however this could be merely inkeeping with the circumstances in which it was written; something I'm forced to consider given the more recent "Something to Think About" drop posted.

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Keep repping LL.

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loiter line was nice.....
liked the cherry on top line.....


im guessing the dot dot dot line is ref.. to not knowing what to do? a lil clarification on that would be appreciated..

like the she tells me to go back n defend line... nice imgery/emotion
^^nvm... i like the whole last 11 lines.. that was DOPE imagery/emotion..

to me i felt u ended this poem/rap better more imagery people could relate to and emotion seemed to be coming fully out.. this started off pretty slow and was hard to catch the flow so i had to start ova and re-read it as a poem... Hopefully this isn't a real life sit.. if it is all i can say is move on for there are plenty of perfect girls out there..

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scott - yeah, i know, we do this shit too much but fuck it as long as it turns out good. ahah

child - most of my writing is real life situations. my poems are forms for me to vent in a creative way. i'm actually a high-spirited person, but you'd be hard struck to find anything that i write to be "happy" 'cause i simply enjoy my life the best i can and when situations like these occur, i examine them and as you suggested, move on. and the best way for me to do that is to write about it

good looks on the feed guys

I love it dude. Way to juxtapose two scenarios, giving us two intensely emotional experience for the price of one. Not only does it help us to find the exact emotion you are trying to convey, it provides a fuller experience. I also applaud how smoothly and proficiently you employed your multies. I will say that if you used more active language (i.e take out all the words that aren't absolutely necessarily it'll look better, be more readable, and just kind of feel more poetic. good stuff man. I'm glad to see you keep a creative candle alight in a sea of whack disses and bs.